Oct 21
Mempf’s Blog: Research Paper
Well as many of you know the HPAW cast has been busy with real life activities such as jobs or in Teclis and my case Simon Frasier University. As I mention in a previous post I have been working on a 3000 word research paper. Well that has now reached draft status and I would like to share it. The topic is the dangers of artificial intelligence.
To read my paper and for more information head over to Mempf’s Blog
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i agree i think we should stop trying to build artificial humans and worry about problems we have now the more advanced things get the more problems well have
it seems pretty nice for a draft, the topic is very intune to your persona giving it some of your own personality. although i do have a few technical writing suggestions,, in ur thesis, try using “Greatly More” rather than “More and More”, its greatly more literate and flowing.(<<see what i did there 🙂 ) also, ur citations are lacking apropriate punctuations, unless things have changed since my school days. all in all (<< also a no no) its beginning to look like a promising paper.
Couldn’t read it, said the file was damaged =/
A very good paper.
the paper was okay, it needs a little proofreading, but your body only contains a little more than 2,800 words. I do not know if the bibliography can be added into the word count, but at NIU, if the paper is 3000 words, there better be 3000 words in the body of the paper.
Quite an impressive paper, I’m sure your professor will find it interesting. Just be sure to clear up those typos. The misspellings and redundant sentences aside, try to use more commas and semicolons to break up your sentences. Also, try to replace some of your nouns and verbs with bigger words. College teachers always appreciate those 😉
And if you can, try to reference some of the AI demonstrated in videogames, such as Army of Two. You know, how when you’re down, but he chooses to not save you….But if you use things that you are knowledgable about, then you can better elaborate your ideas.